Monday 21 July 2014

THE SIXTH GUEST: Chapter One - Part Five



Clare’s mind was in full shutdown but her body thrashed wildly, arms out, head rocking hard forward to connect with her chest, then back. Her legs bowed, the knees smacked back together. She froze utterly rigid, shoulders raised, muscles locked tight, held the rigidity for perhaps seven seconds then all the stiffness vanished and she toppled forward, knocking into the table and pushing it out of position as she collapsed at an angle to the floor.

Ralph came close to where she lay and snapped up at the empty space above her, teeth bared fully, roaring in terrified but angry protection of his mistress. The invisible thing, blithely indifferent, hovered silently in the space Clare had occupied before she pitched forward. It remained there as it had done in the downstairs toilet above Henry, then it rose serenely to the kitchen ceiling and passed through, emerging from the darkness beneath the upstairs floorboards into Clare’s empty double bedroom.

As soon as it was gone the temperature in the kitchen started to drop.

Upstairs, the bed was unmade, the covers curiously undisturbed on the side closest to the window. The door to the en-suite stood ajar. Around the floor were piles of clothes and other detritus that hadn’t been cleared away. Clare was highly polished when it came to the public areas, making sure everything was neat for her guests, but deplorably bad within the confines of her personal chamber.

The invisible thing, whatever it was, didn’t tarry. It passed through the wardrobe on the inside wall into the empty bathroom, glided over the bath and kept going, passing again through the wall. In each room it passed the temperature jumped, climbing fast, then dropped again as it vanished, moving onward.

Beyond the bathroom was an empty bedroom, as yet not let out to any guests. The bed was made, ready for a visitor to take up residence without prior notice. There were empty shelves on the wall next to the window and a cheap cloth wardrobe, its hanging cover tied up in a narrow curl to reveal empty coat hangers on the internal rail.

The room beyond was at the front of the house: the large room belonging to Henry Court with its bay window mirroring the lounge below. Again the invisible visitor passed through the room but didn’t linger. The physical objects collected across a lifetime of living and crammed now, where possible, into one room were of no interest to it.

Drawing close to the left hand wall it slowed, sensing perhaps what was beyond: the final first floor room and the only room in the house now that was inhabited.

9 comments:

  1. Thank goodness Clare isn't dead, although she is going to have severe whiplash! Good for Ralph, protecting his mistress even when terrified. But what is this entity that makes the temperature rise to such heights; what is it's purpose, it's goal? Who knows? Well Emma may...
    Riveting stuff! I so look forward to publishing hour - my guilty pleasure.

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    1. Thanks Sal! Yeah I like Ralph. He deserves a good pat on the head.

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  2. Isn't she dead? not sure about that; she sounds pretty much insensate, to say the least. I am wondering about whom the other 4 guests may turn out to be... guess we're about to meet one of them.

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    1. You are right Dandelion - wishful thinking on my part - IT may have attempting to inhabit her body is all. I guess we will see in due course. :-)

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    2. It's so interesting hearing you guys conjecture about the story, often in surprising ways. Things that seemed obvious to me when writing often come across in different ways. It's cool.

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    3. It's all part of the fun of being a Finnatic. I am addicted!

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  3. the temperature is a nice touch, many ghost stories have the temperature change as a clue but it is usually a temperature drop rather than a rise.

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    1. Ah, but is it a ghost? It may be a form of energy, which is more likely to be hot!
      We will know one day - when Emma deigns to reveal all! :-)

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    2. What she said. Nothing is certain yet!

      Though we'll be getting another little piece of the puzzle tonight in the finale of chapter one...

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